Was it you?

[korkor]

i cant believe i still have this memory
the day you decided to set me free
it was like my precious life, left without me
my heart felt words only pushed you away i could not let you be
my tear filled eyes would just not let me see
that it was over, and you'd fade to just a memory


i just can't get this out of my mind
the further i get it seems to just rewind
the ultimate bind
even when i close my eyes its you i find
just give it time
you say,
but god its been forever
the sunlight sets me free, but dark clouds the weather
and it pains me to death when we are not together
you left, no room, your heart skin tight leather
a love that can not be measured
why did you let me go?
your love strands, My did they flow
in my heart they've sown
left for my heart to beat so slow
babe please no...
why?
why must it be so?


i wonder if you know how this pain feels
if you ever had wounds to heal
if you ever had such a sadness you had to conceal
but i cant hold back, these feelings pour out as i start to peel
my love was alone, to you its unreal
your memory i just want to kill
fucking love sick but i am not even ill
with all the whiskey,with all the pills
have i really lost my will?
hemorrhage
you
the blood in me it starts to spill
uphill, uphill
but i am only going downhill
the skies of dark blue
laying here with all that I've been through
i am left for dead, this is true.
tonight i will not come to
my eyes rolling back
shadowy panorama accrues
was it you....?

[Leanne]

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[animasrwm]

You know what I like this . A pretty good summation of what it feels like to have lost in love though a bit dramatic towards the end for my taste. My only comment would be to lose the last 12 or so lines as I feel it stands on its own up to then.
A good effort here.Not pretentious just honest feeling that for anyone who's lost in love are real