Cameron's Epic
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Cameron’s Epic

I stood nearly naked,
In the Glorious Elysian Fields,
The color of grain I’d never taken,
And at once my wounds were healed.

Dancing round were three forms,
A beauty I’d never think to see,
At once my mind was torn,
Between asking my position and watching the scene.

They made the choice for me,
Took my by the hand,
And lead me across the sea,
To a mountain stretched across the land.

I knew at once it was Olympus,
The land of nectar and history,
An oasis out of the tempest,
Clouded by fame and mystery.

“Shall we climb to Olympus?”
I asked to the graces,
“We leave you here for her to find”
Said the look on thier faces.

And with that they were gone,
My only guides had left,
And I was scared like a baby fawn,
Trembling confused at the mountains cleft.




“Who should find me?”
I screamed to empty space,
My only reply was silence,
So I began to walk and pace.

Before the fear could claim me,
An image began to appear,
A shrill sound and blinding light,
Into my senses did sear.

And who should stand above me,
But a lady I’ve only dreamed of,
A woman clothed in beauty,
A goddess of love.

“You have many questions,
But may ask only two,
And be careful what you ask,
For I only answer true.”

I approached the woman,
A brunette in golden robes,
The Roman Goddess Venus,
Who blesses men in droves.

She stood above me,
Like an angel with wings,
A thousand things worth asking,
A thousand songs to sing.




I bowed my head,
And slowly approached with care,
Each step nearing the beauty,
At which I longed to stare.

If my time here be short,
I thought inside my mind,
Then particular I must be,
To seek the answers I mean to find.

But what are my questions?
What do I want to know?
Which questions are worthy?
Which seeds shall I sow?

Do I ask of myself,
Do I ask of my past,
Do I ask of my future,
Do I ask to see beyond this glass?

And should I want the answers,
To my great curiosity,
What if they to mine ears,
Be sounds only of blasphemy?

But now I was at her feet,
Clothed in leather straps,
And no other thought would permeate,
but to wonder if this be a trap.




“I am Venus” she said,
“And for you I answer clear,
But be warned you must speak up,
If only so that I may hear.

For not always did I,
Govern matters of the heart,
Once upon a time,
War was my only art.

And the cannons and the screams,
Of each man and woman that left,
Has wieghed heavily on my heart,
And left me nearly deaf.

Bow at my feet no longer,
For I see that you are strong,
You stand up for what you know,
And stand tall amongst the throng.

So rise now and ask me,
And I will answer one time,
Then move swiftly along,
For there are more to find.”

I stood up right then,
And opened my mouth to speak,
And Venus raised an eyebrow,
As if her curiosity piqued.




I thought only for a moment,
Then let the words come out,
My question seemed very simple,
But sounded somewhat stout.

“Do I truly love him?”
Came the words so quick,
And the sound of them was jarring,
Like a drum beat by a stick.

Venus smiled largely,
And threw her head back in a laugh,
Sat me down on the stone next to her,
And rested her hand on my calf.

“In all my years,” she began,
“I’ve never seen this before,
We both know that answer,
So do not think me untowards.

You love him like none other,
And that frightens you so,
And it causes you distress,
Because it’s something you do not know.

You are a man proud of knowledge,
Always seeking things to learn,
And to understand this feeling,
Is all you longer for yearn.




My answer is yes,
But we both knew that,
So rest assured you do love him,
Your heart is where it should be at.”

So I took a moment for myself,
To let the answer inside me lie,
Sink into my understanding,
So that I never question why.

“Love is something new to you,
And you fear it may be lost,
You don’t want to leave that way,
You don’t want to pay that cost.

But your feelings are true,
I see them like a rose,
You’ve opened your heart to him,
And refuse to let it close.

So now ask your final question,
And answer I will,
So that your heart may be calm,
So that it may be still.

I knew now that I loved him,
That much was clear,
And I brought out my second question,
And shed a single tear.




She wiped it from my eye,
And smiled with such grace,
She knew what my question was,
I could see it in her face.

“While it is in my power,
To answer you true,
I think I’m not the one,
To give the answer to you.

For that is an answer,
That means nothing from me,
Ask the proper person,
And the answer you will see.

But take that answer truly,
Whether it be what you wanted or not,
For this answer will set you free,
And provide the things you sought.

If the answer be yes,
Then I wish you all my love,
But know if the answer be no,
It is not always the monster you thought of.

Now come with me.
So that you may have your reply,
It’s the best time to return,
Now while the tide is high.”




So she led me across the sea,
Through the fields of grain now fell,
And at the edge she kissed me,
And bid me Farewell.

And at once I had found you,
Standing quiet and alone,
My courage was now full,
For this answer I had to know.

So by the hand I took you,
And looked you in the eye,
I opened my mouth to ask you,
Willing my heart to try.

So one last time I asked you,
For sure I must be,
I need only one honest answer,
“Do you love me?”
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#2
Of course the rhymes sound forced and lots of lines are filler, but I've read worse in popular translations.

If you could find some original and urgent feeling material, maybe you'd strengthen your form and write something more memorable with less slack.
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#3
Well what can I say about this one . You lost me first verse. I just did not get it.
On a plus point judging by the amount of words you put down there is definitely something
Inside you trying to get out. My advice would be less at this stage is more
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#4
I liked the song very much.
Though there were some lines at the beginning of the poem that i didnt quite get, i must give you credit for keeping me in suspense about what the second question was. I found myself eager to get the answer, but at the same time enjoying the lines as i progressed through the story. It felt very rewarding.
Thank you for the poem.
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