On feeling

[Bunx]

EDIT 1
I feel mute in life,
and blind in vision.
You're talking,
therefore I must agree.

Oh you're looking down,
so look up.
You leave me,
but I must stay put.

Stay, where you are.
You can't run away
from the world.
Worlds will run from you.

Living, is a must.
Got to trust that,
tomorrow is your heaven.

Feeling, a thought
turned into a sensation
that makes you, you.

[animasrwm]

Seems like a good effort to me

[Martyr]

Its hard to get a singular overall concept, but that may also have been your intentions by using "feelings". I like the in text double rhyme but i have to assume that it was unintentional cause it has no pattern and only appears once; "Living is a must. Got to trust that.". unless stay and runaway is intentional too. hhmmm. overall it has elements that work and i like it, maybe change line 2 so its a statement and not a question, which may help flow.

[Bunx]

martyr- thanks for the feedback. I do try and use internal rhymes when they happen to pop in the brain. I think I will re word the second line. thanks for the feedback!

[Bunx]

foggle- thanks for the feedback. i did lose L1 and L2, originally this line was meant to set theme. but i don't think it is needed as well.
thanks for the read!