To someone.

[PoetryAndPhysics]

Softly sing in circles and twirl with the breeze
and say to me you'll not stray to heaven
or to its purple and green thunder clouds.
Stop with your homeopathic pills.
We battled Lego's as if yesterday afternoon.
And our distance is like a loss that's not yet occurred,
but please let it not occur.
I'd be a spectral man who chokes on every second,
crawling the halls of the world with quantum physics texts:
a withered brain without an observer.
So please, ohh listen to my grieving,
don't die while I'm still living.

[newsclippings]

Softly sing in circles and twirl with the breeze This may be better as an image in your head than written down.
and say to me you'll not stray to heaven
or to its purple and green thunder clouds.This is like Hercules. Like... this Hercules (actually see below):
Stop with your homeopathic pills.
We battled Lego's as if yesterday afternoon.I certainly have, have you ever stepped on one of those fuckers?
And our distance is like a loss that's not yet occurred,
but please let it not occur.
I'd be a spectral man who chokes on every second,
crawling the halls of the world with quantum physics texts:
a withered brain without an observer. Reminds me of something I watched on the history channel about a famous mathematician.
So please, ohh listen to my grieving,
don't die while I'm still living.

Good shootin', Rex. I'll give a go again when I read it a few more times.

Herculeeeeez Nutz.

[billy]

i love the title in relation to the context of the poem. the beginning of the poem points to a specific someone. yet the latter part points to a possibility of someone, it's a little wordy in places but there's something i can't put my finger on which makes me like it.

Softly sing in circles and twirl with the breeze i like the opening line but thing you could better rearrange the line. a suggestion; [Softly sing and twirl in circles with the breeze]
and say to me you'll not stray to heaven no need for [and]
or to its purple and green thunder clouds. no need for [to]
Stop with your homeopathic pills. check spelling of [homoeopathic]
We battled Lego's as if yesterday afternoon. lego or lego's something,
And our distance is like a loss that's not yet occurred, no need for [like] or [that's]
but please let it not occur.
I'd be a spectral man who chokes on every second,
crawling the halls of the world with quantum physics texts: physic's
a withered brain without an observer.
So please, ohh listen to my grieving,
don't die while I'm still living.

[newsclippings]

There's a lot of pain in this poem. And it came through after I read it seriously.

[PoetryAndPhysics]

newsclippings- I did watch that Hercules when I was a kid, though no reference consciously intended. Thanks, glad (though maybe that's not the right word) it translated.

billy- Agreed, especially the Legoe's line comes off as very autobiographical (which it is) in the first half, among the things I wasn't sure about here. I feel uncertain now about the potential apostrophe in physics; certainly it isn't plural, but then I'm not sure I'd give "Quantum Mechanics texts" one for being possessive, and quantum physics is the same things. Bit like grocer's apostrophe...

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