Baby on Board

[LaughGiraffe]

A newborn on the high dive
Supervising eyes frozen upward
in numbed skulls with slacked jaws.
To go to her is to startle her.
Giggles from 33 feet in the air
Sweet child so unaware,
finding fun in the danger,
crawling toward the wide open wonderment
glowing blue glass.
An infantile attraction to all that glitters
And she falls
Mommy's single anguished cry
Baby soft flesh spanked and slapped
then engulfed in a cold and transparent womb
A chlorine blanket
then sleep

[rowens]

Are the capital letters at the beginnings of some lines and the punctuation the way you prefer? Or did you want periods where the next line starts with a capital?

[ireland4scots]

Not gonna question why a mother would even consider taking a newborn up that high, but what a good dark poem. I especially love the ending where it contrast the rhythm of the poem. And also a nice pairing of the "blanket" and sleep, which of course has a darker meaning. As I would prefer like rowens is every letter capitalized in the begging of each line, but I'm sure you're piecing together certain lines in this way.

[gdimonaco]

I'm guessing the supervising adults didn't take her up there. It gave me a general feeling of dread, but in a good way like a horror movie. Hope that's what you were going for.

[LaughGiraffe]

Sorry if the capitalizations and punctuation were distracting I guess I didn't realize how all over the place it is. But thanks for the feedback. I was trying to portray this idea of a loss of innocence or the danger in being too naive