no reentry..

[samfish]

my keyboard has no backspace
it does not return
where it wence came
only my forwards
like a tornado moving onward
and behind it the blessed curse of
the destruction of a normality
and insane to saythat a tornadeo
what was once normal
a harmelss destructive force
of the universe

the keyboard the same
wrekclessly travels
without gowing backwards
and traipses to destroy
a way that was

no right the course
no fixing hte boat
no destruction unaimed
by some guided force in the uinverse
i have faith the keyboard does too
to have pulled away its capacity
to forget

i have the same
itslikely
all remais always ever after
and intnetions are esults
of past consequences
in reaction we come to ahrmony

good thing for the monk
thelo
the monk who said not of wrong notes
said that there was no such things
as wrong notes
but notes simply
needing a contextualization

in the resolution
the sinner becomes a saint
the muddy becomes a clairty
and in the story in the end
it is always so
the muddy was the casue of the calrity
the frog became a frog
to sing loud of its hell
and princesses quivered

likea tornado in the sky
eclipses the moons
and tides will be dimmed
by the tornado of the sky
eclipsed by the mono

running forth
no broken keyboard
just one that cant hit
“backspace”
.

[Leanne]

This is the best excuse for making typos I've ever heard

Additionally, it does make for interesting philosophy -- we are very reliant on the "quick fix" being instantly available, and so are lost when we make errors that can't be readily corrected. Perhaps, as you say, they are not errors but fate.

This does offer quite a bit to think about and this time, I'm going to leave it in the Serious Critique section -- but for future reference, we do expect our members to give detailed, meaningful critiques rather than generic praise.

*I changed my mind and have moved this to Miscellaneous, given the poster's inability to follow instructions.

[R.C. KITCHENS]

my keyboard has no backspace
it does not return
where it wence came
only my forwards
like a tornado moving onward
and behind it the blessed curse of
the destruction of a normality
and insane to saythat a tornadeo (( say that, tornado))
what was once normal
a harmelss destructive force
of the universe

This is very hard to understand. You need "are" where you say only "my forwards like a tornado moving onward" and following that line, There is lack of coherency. I think if you work on it, you could present it better with imagery.

the keyboard the same
wrekclessly travelswrecklessly
without gowing backwardsgoing
and traipses to destroy traipses makes no sense to me as you use it
a way that was

no right the course
no fixing hte boatthe
no destruction unaimed
by some guided force in the uinverse
i have faith the keyboard does too
to have pulled away its capacity
to forget
a keyboard is an inadement object. It is incapable to memorize.
i have the same
itslikely [b]it's likely
all remais always ever after remains
and intnetions are esults intentions, results
of past consequences
in reaction we come to ahrmony harmony

good thing for the monk
thelo
the monk who said not of wrong notes
said that there was no such things
as wrong notes
but notes simply
needing a contextualization

in the resolution
the sinner becomes a saint
the muddy becomes a clairty
and in the story in the end
it is always so
the muddy was the casue of the calritycause,clarity
the frog became a frog how does a frog become a frog? it is one!
to sing loud of its hell
and princesses quivered

likea tornado in the sky like a
eclipses the moons
and tides will be dimmed
by the tornado of the sky
eclipsed by the mono

running forth
no broken keyboard
just one that cant hit
“backspace”
.

I like that you want to write poetry. But, you have a great deal of work to do. The piece is all over the place. first your describing your keyboard and then a tornado's destruction and then you talk about a monk and princesses. It didn't tie together in any respect. You ended the poem going back to the keyboard. I was unable to enjoy this effort and it is riddled with misspellings and the inability to use words coherently.
On the misspellings alone, this effort shouldn't be in serious critique.
You also have left feedback in this forum which related to maybe ten words. The serious forum is for a more detailed critique. I am not ripping on you or trying to discourage you,just trying to help. You should use this as a draft and take some time to read several poems and get a grip of how the direction stays constant and how imagery is used. I believe you should post poetry in novice critique for the time being. I still use the forum as my poetry is still less advanced for serious critique. It is a good starter forum. Welcome, and if you want to give critique in this forum please offer more than a few words. If you feel like you cant offer the critique required, offer critique in novice. Welcome.[/b]

[tectak]

my keyboard has no backspace
it does not return
where it wence came
only my forwards
like a tornado moving onward
and behind it the blessed curse of
the destruction of a normality
and insane to saythat a tornadeo (( say that, tornado))
what was once normal
a harmelss destructive force
of the universe

This is very hard to understand. You need "are" where you say only "my forwards like a tornado moving onward" and following that line, There is lack of coherency. I think if you work on it, you could present it better with imagery.

the keyboard the same
wrekclessly travelswrecklessly
without gowing backwardsgoing
and traipses to destroy traipses makes no sense to me as you use it
a way that was

no right the course
no fixing hte boatthe
no destruction unaimed
by some guided force in the uinverse
i have faith the keyboard does too
to have pulled away its capacity
to forget
a keyboard is an inadement object. It is incapable to memorize.
i have the same
itslikely [b]it's likely
all remais always ever after remains
and intnetions are esults intentions, results
of past consequences
in reaction we come to ahrmony harmony

good thing for the monk
thelo
the monk who said not of wrong notes
said that there was no such things
as wrong notes
but notes simply
needing a contextualization

in the resolution
the sinner becomes a saint
the muddy becomes a clairty
and in the story in the end
it is always so
the muddy was the casue of the calritycause,clarity
the frog became a frog how does a frog become a frog? it is one!
to sing loud of its hell
and princesses quivered

likea tornado in the sky like a
eclipses the moons
and tides will be dimmed
by the tornado of the sky
eclipsed by the mono

running forth
no broken keyboard
just one that cant hit
“backspace”
.

I like that you want to write poetry. But, you have a great deal of work to do. The piece is all over the place. first your describing your keyboard and then a tornado's destruction and then you talk about a monk and princesses. It didn't tie together in any respect. You ended the poem going back to the keyboard. I was unable to enjoy this effort and it is riddled with misspellings and the inability to use words coherently.
On the misspellings alone, this effort shouldn't be in serious critique.
You also have left feedback in this forum which related to maybe ten words. The serious forum is for a more detailed critique. I am not ripping on you or trying to discourage you,just trying to help. You should use this as a draft and take some time to read several poems and get a grip of how the direction stays constant and how imagery is used. I believe you should post poetry in novice critique for the time being. I still use the forum as my poetry is still less advanced for serious critique. It is a good starter forum. Welcome, and if you want to give critique in this forum please offer more than a few words. If you feel like you cant offer the critique required, offer critique in novice. Welcome.[/b]

Seconded. Sorry leanne, what's sorce fro the gouse is sorce for teh gnader.
Put it write, right, then repost. I get the joke. ha bloody ha.
Best,
tectak

[Leanne]

The "no backspace key" is the reason for the typos... it's ironic, unless I'm giving the poet too much credit, which given the lack of actual critiques around the place may indeed be the case.

samfish, you are skating very close to being banned on your first day, and we wouldn't want that now would we?

[R.C. KITCHENS]

The "no backspace key" is the reason for the typos... it's ironic, unless I'm giving the poet too much credit, which given the lack of actual critiques around the place may indeed be the case.

samfish, you are skating very close to being banned on your first day, and we wouldn't want that now would we?

Maybe his backspace key doesn't work. But, he could have just rewrote it.

[samfish]

it literally has no backspace as well.
thank you critics, bless you all