Odeon Foxtrot Infinite

[serge gurkski]

The Tramp Dossier

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I. Odeon Foxtrot (Infinite)


cashed ten bucks
sent by my lover,
walked back home,
landed at the
Feldherrnhalle,
took a break there
where Herr Hitler
unfortunately only almost
pegged out.

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(I sat left to that phallus-like thing, called a Säule in German. Was gone (fishing I guess))

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No Marcia su Roma,
No march on Rome, Adolfo!
You are as yet
no Mussolini.

Pulled out my bottle
to salute you
not.
Was distracted,
by brown legs.

And by a
plucked bass
Romani-style.

Had to smile:
they're still there
and you're gone.

The Romani man
played it good
on and on and on:
Kept me walking
out of town.
straight out of town.

Where I belong:
I trot like a fox
out of town.

Plastic tourist smiles
to the left and to the right,
plastic brains
tumbling in the
diminishing summer light.

Kept my chin up
and my eyes down low ...


Kept my chin up
and my eyes down low ...

till I land again
in your loving smiles:



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*The pathetic Nazi blethering (partial translation):

„Wussten sie …

Did they know why?
4 years of murderous existence.
Did the dead know,
did the living know?
And if they all knew it
how then could hatred
make Germans hate Germans?
But one of you knew why.
...
You have to be brave.
His death, too,
will make sense.
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I spare myself and you the rest.

Background: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Beer_Hall_Putsch


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[billy]

hi serge. let start off by saying i see you're trying for something extra in your artistic endeavour here, the poem has a slow jazz feel to it though maybe the vid is the thing that makes me see the words that way. i have no idea what the accented syllables are for, and think the background stuff would better at the bottom of the poem. doing a line by line of it is beyond me. in suppose ways it feels like a concerto with highs, or in this case lows and lows. getting ten bucks seems
low because it looks like an anti climax

i watched the munchen vid while reading the rest of the poem and it added something though i'm not sure what. it did allow me to read the whole poem 4 or 5 times as though i was on a slow march.

And by a
plucked bass
Romani-style.

somehow capture the freedom within the piece. it has a sonic quality.

The Romani man
played it good
on and on and on:
Kept me walking
out of town.
straight out of town.

i like the repetitions in this small stanza, which obviously feel connected to the freedom thing i was on about.

the girls pic which is very nice, makes the poem to personal for me and i feel as though i'm intruding on something, which i may be, but i'd sooner want to be part of the poem that to be an interloper into some love thang.

the nazi blethering for me is to..i'm not sure really but it's feels a bit forced, maybe it's the lines

But one of you knew why.
...
You have to be brave.
His death, too,
will make sense.

I spare myself and you the rest.

wish i could have been more help, i'm not used to the artsy stuff the vids do add to the poem

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i just saw it's in miscellaneous oops, I can put it in serious if you want

[serge gurkski]

hi serge. let start off by saying i see you're trying for something extra in your artistic endeavour here, the poem has a slow jazz feel to it though maybe the vid is the thing that makes me see the words that way. i have no idea what the accented syllables are for, and think the background stuff would better at the bottom of the poem. doing a line by line of it is beyond me. in suppose ways it feels like a concerto with highs, or in this case lows and lows. getting ten bucks seems
low because it looks like an anti climax

i watched the munchen vid while reading the rest of the poem and it added something though i'm not sure what. it did allow me to read the whole poem 4 or 5 times as though i was on a slow march.

And by a
plucked bass
Romani-style.

somehow capture the freedom within the piece. it has a sonic quality.

The Romani man
played it good
on and on and on:
Kept me walking
out of town.
straight out of town.

i like the repetitions in this small stanza, which obviously feel connected to the freedom thing i was on about.

the girls pic which is very nice, makes the poem to personal for me and i feel as though i'm intruding on something, which i may be, but i'd sooner want to be part of the poem that to be an interloper into some love thang.

the nazi blethering for me is to..i'm not sure really but it's feels a bit forced, maybe it's the lines

But one of you knew why.
...
You have to be brave.
His death, too,
will make sense.

I spare myself and you the rest.

wish i could have been more help, i'm not used to the artsy stuff the vids do add to the poem

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i just saw it's in miscellaneous oops, I can put it in serious if you want

I dunno, billy. Maybe wait a bit before moving because I add stuff to this (to me important stuff). It is part of the tramp dossier.

Ty for the feedback. I'll get to that.
young serge ;-) Ha!

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the accented syllables: the shops were closed= no beer = idle = accented sylables. ;-)

bad state of mind.

[billy]

no probs.

[serge gurkski]

;-) I am in a messy state of mind.

[Leanne]

Kept me walking
out of town.
straight out of town.

Where I belong:
I trot like a fox
out of town.

Indeed, Hitler and Mussolini were rather nasty blokes -- but these lines for me are the most poignant in the poem. This is the point where the tramp communicates that he is being moved on because he doesn't deserve to be allowed to stay. He accepts his lack of acceptance. He values himself only in the moment. This is especially emotive against the backdrop of these enduring cities with their monuments as measurements of man's achievements.

Heart, you're certainly entitled to comment as you please and we'd never delete what you're saying, especially not in Miscellaneous -- although I don't think billy's disparaging anyone's poverty, just the order of lines in the poem.

[billy]

Billy , forgive me for coming on like this , feel the need to comment here, don't know why. re: per Billy,
"getting ten bucks seems
low because it looks like an anti climax Big Grin"

In my world 20.00 bucks is a lot of money, especially when some secretiveness may be necessary. I would face whatever I need to if I felt my loved one, or even a total stranger might go without food or basic necessities without a helping hand.
So, get your delete button ready, or just call me "schmuck" from here on. btw, should you ever need help and I am able to, let me know.
Heart

no need to delete. your point is valid, i actually come from a background of poverty and living on the street so i understand what you mean. luckily i'm now at a stage where 10 or 20 bucks is a small amount. i think all POV's are as relevant as mine