Going Hikiing

[Bunx]

hmmm. hiking,
where to go on this bodacious blue
bird day. pictures to take,
wishes to pray.

all my wishes have come true,
for the most part. prayer
sometime feels like a wart.
if only healing can be answered
by prayer, and not only
by you.

Jackson, Mr Storm I may presume.
How I use an old life to seek refuge
from the thunder of life. Bang,
it goes loudly. Our laughter gangs
softly, in the beautiful breeze
of the bountiful bob marshal.

i wish i could take back god,
or what was left of his creation.
my imagination was lethal with
delusional constitutional seclusion.
hiking, finally. i can take a hike
at last.

i wonder if mr. storm will like
the striking he can easily hike.
the mossy greens, mixed with the dry.
sandwiches abundant, sorry no rye.

"Why, did you pick this summit?"
mr. storm said with a laugh.

well storm, i say with a gash.
no wound will stop me from
climbing to the top. i dont need
heaven to tell me. all the things
my mind has forgot. because
i know this is not made up.
and so i am i. not made up
of bread nor rye.

[Brownlie]

hmmm. hiking,
where to go on this bodacious blue
bird day. pictures to take,
wishes to pray.

all my wishes have come true,
for the most part. prayer
sometime feels like a wart.
if only healing can be answered -- What are you talking about with healing
by prayer, and not only
by you.

i wish i could take back god,
or what was left of his creation.
my imagination was lethal with
delusional constitutional seclusion.
hiking, finally. i can take a hike
at last.

i wonder if mr. storm will like
the striking he can easily hike. -- Mr. Storm Hikes?
the mossy greens, mixed with the dry.
sandwiches abundant, sorry no rye. - We used to bring sandwiches when I went hiking with my family
"
Why, did you pick this summit?"
mr. storm said with a laugh.

well storm, i say with a gash. Say with a gash?
no wound will stop me from
climbing to the top. i dont need
heaven to tell me. all the things
my mind has forgot. because
i know this is not made up.
and so i am i. not made up
of bread nor rye.

I like the sentiment of the poem, but I did find some of it confusing and I had to read through it a couple of times to make sense of some things. If you have the time you might want to try experimenting with some forms of poetry like sonnets or something. I'd like to hear a poem with Mr.Storm as the narrator.

[Bunx]

hmmm. hiking,
where to go on this bodacious blue
bird day. pictures to take,
wishes to pray.

all my wishes have come true,
for the most part. prayer
sometime feels like a wart.
if only healing can be answered -- What are you talking about with healing
by prayer, and not only
by you.

i wish i could take back god,
or what was left of his creation.
my imagination was lethal with
delusional constitutional seclusion.
hiking, finally. i can take a hike
at last.

i wonder if mr. storm will like
the striking he can easily hike. -- Mr. Storm Hikes?
the mossy greens, mixed with the dry.
sandwiches abundant, sorry no rye. - We used to bring sandwiches when I went hiking with my family
"
Why, did you pick this summit?"
mr. storm said with a laugh.

well storm, i say with a gash. Say with a gash?
no wound will stop me from
climbing to the top. i dont need
heaven to tell me. all the things
my mind has forgot. because
i know this is not made up.
and so i am i. not made up
of bread nor rye.

I like the sentiment of the poem, but I did find some of it confusing and I had to read through it a couple of times to make sense of some things. If you have the time you might want to try experimenting with some forms of poetry like sonnets or something. I'd like to hear a poem with Mr.Storm as the narrator.

haha my buddy is named jackson storm and ill take a little work on it