I remember...

[peterjohnson68]

I remember…

being in love with you.
dinner.
your green eyes.
your head on my lap.
my fingers in your hair.
the words you spoke.
your breath on my neck.
the softness of your lips.
your hand on my chest.
your sly smile.
my hand in yours.
your hair in my face.
your veiled anger as I threw your blouse across the room.
the curve of your breast.
my hands on your smooth tan thighs.
your moans.
you telling me not to stop.
walking you to your car.
kissing you goodbye.
the smell of your hair on my pillow the next morning.
thinking we had a future.
our phone call the next night.
your question.
my answer.
my heart breaking.

[YaMarVa]

Good poem, I think your message is clear.

Whats with all the periods? I'm not sure they work for every line. Re-reading your poem, you only need, maybe, three?

[c.gutzwiller]

I like it. What if you ended it with the same line, being in love with you. Bring it back around.

[R.C. KITCHENS]

I like the simplicity of the piece. You use "your" alot. I think you could lose a few of those. Maybe lose some periods. Imagery is here in small doses.