Blind love

[Ryan_w_r]

-Blind Love-

She lay by the ocean, eyes wide open, starring at the sun,

Wishing the waves would wash her away, wishing the days would just be done

Her moist blond hair smelled of the sea as it lay across her breasts

Her lightly freckled, and sun soaked skin was coated in a shimmering mist

Her body was that of a goddess,

Effortlessly flawless.

Her eyes like glaciers, a light milky blue

She sensed someone was near, but did not know who.

The beauty that I speak of was born without sight

So I have taken it upon myself to protect her day and night.

She does not know who I am, but I have been with her for some time.

I will stay by her side until the day, the day i make her mine.

I have foiled many attempts, of this young beauty trying to end her life

Once with the cut of a noose, and twice with the stop of a knife.

I didn't even get a thank you, she would just run and leave me there cold

All I really wanted in return was her beauty for me to hold

I wish she could see what I do, maybe that would stop her pain

What if I could fix her vision? with a little tinkering of her brain.

So late one night, I spirit her away

Away to my home, and there she will stay.

So here she lay, gaged and bound

Sobbing in my bed, howling like a hound.

Finally she is mine, and rightfully so!

I have been her guardian, this is the least that I am owed.

All of the questions lingering in my brain

Like why don't you love me? and why the FUCK were you calling me insane?

So I removed her gag and screamed "AM I INSANE BECAUSE I LOVE YOU!? IS IT INSANE TO CARE!?"

To which she sobbingly replied "this isn't how you treat someone you love, and don't you touch me, DON'T YOU EVEN DARE!"

"I haven't tried to end my life because I cannot see."

"I want to kill myself because I can't get YOU away from ME!"

[Bunx]

awww!! this is a glorious poem! being from missoula (the rape capital of the united states rofl)
this hits home hard. i think your speaking from the view point of some kind of mental doctor who has a remedy for immortality. i love these short stories/pose you write. it make my morning hmmm a delight?

[Ryan_w_r]

awww!! this is a glorious poem! being from missoula (the rape capital of the united states rofl)
this hits home hard. i think your speaking from the view point of some kind of mental doctor who has a remedy for immortality. i love these short stories/pose you write. it make my morning hmmm a delight?

Thanks so much!! I like my poems to to be more like a short story that paint an interesting picture. Im really glad you can appreciate them!! Seems like some people don't really like the rhyming in my writing. To me making it rhyme is a fun part of the challenge.

[Bunx]

i would consider it free-form pose short stories (if this was music) core. it has a edge-ee vampire edge. sharp yet considerate. anywhere else on the net and you'd have fan girls

[Ryan_w_r]

i would consider it free-form pose short stories (if this was music) core. it has a edge-ee vampire edge. sharp yet considerate. anywhere else on the net and you'd have fan girls

Many people have said my writing is more a prose than a poem. I hadn't even know what that was until about 2 minutes ago when google filled me in, And I agree.... Prose it is.

[Bunx]

read American Gods. you will love it ryan!

[Ryan_w_r]

read American Gods. you will love it ryan!

I will pick it up tonight! I've been needing a good read. Thanks

[Todd]

Moved at author's request to reflect that Miscellaneous might be a better home for the prose elements of the piece.

[rowens]

It doesn't really seem like prose. Do you want the spaces between the lines?

[Ryan_w_r]

It doesn't really seem like prose. Do you want the spaces between the lines?

I "write" all my pomes on my iPhone notepad and the spaces help me break it up so my eyes don't float around the on the little screen. So no I should edit is and remove the spaces.. As far as this and my other poem "the play" goes multiple members have told me that they are more prose than poems.. I didn't even know what a prose was until today so I just went with what I was being told... And now your comment is adding to my confusion.. Haha thanks for always wanting to help out. I really do appreciate it.

[rowens]

This poem has end rhymes, and it has the shape of verse. There isn't a steady meter, but there almost is. That's not bad in and of itself. You can do things that way. But rhymes usually work better with a structured rhythm. There's a kind of rhythm here.

Your last reply to me is in the form of prose. Some people write prose poems; and some people write free verse, or whatever people call it. There are limitless ways you can do things. As long as you somehow get that poetic magic to come through.

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And American Gods is a pretty good book. I always liked The Sandman by the same person.

[Ryan_w_r]

This poem has end rhymes, and it has the shape of verse. There isn't a steady meter, but there almost is. That's not bad in and of itself. You can do things that way. But rhymes usually work better with a structured rhythm. There's a kind of rhythm here.

Your last reply to me is in the form of prose. Some people write prose poems; and some people write free verse, or whatever people call it. There are limitless ways you can do things. As long as you somehow get that poetic magic to come through.

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And American Gods is a pretty good book. I always liked The Sandman by the same person.

Thanks, I will pick it up as well... That is if I can find them.

[rowens]

The Sandman was a comic book series. For the non-super hero DC Vertigo, "for mature audiences", whatever that means. But it dealt with gods and dreams sort of like American Gods.