Xenophobia

[spowell421]

I'm disappointed and severely irritated,
These bureaucrats appointed are very overrated,
The power is becoming more concentrated,
As the common man's life becomes more complicated,
Personal Policies are being debated,
So the snakes in the system can be over compensated,
Still desirable even when degraded,
And fake to the core when excavated,
Is the American Dream really gold plated?

Can the dream ever be achieved,
or just a concept only to be believed,
I'll never know how it feels to be an American set free,
But the stories in my history book has left a fire burning in me,
I wish i was alive to see these concepts conceived,
But its 2013 and I feel I've been deceived.

Its hard to know what to fight for,
When there is nothing anyone is willing to DIE for,
Its hard for a country to become uniform,
When all society wants is to keep us torn,
My country has lost its identity and has dropped to all fours,
Why isnt anyone teaching us to appreciate where were born,
To understand this concept my generation will have to look to our fathers before.

[jkaram]

I like the sincerity and emotion of this poem. I will say though that the rhyming is so tight/emphasized that it takes away from this and leads to a challenge for the (this?) reader's as far as focus. So the question is: Do you want to emphasize the rhyming or the story?

[spowell421]

Both. I was trying to express more of a feeling to the reader then a story. I do agree that in some parts the rhyming takes away from the meter. I really like poems that have good rhyming schemes and also express raw emotion to me thats the best poetry. Thank you so much for your feedback I'll try my hardest to keep the rhyme and your attention.