05-06-2013, 04:56 PM
I'm almost inclined to think that the teaser for that other poem is a tad too fat. To put it in a nutshell: "spring follows winter". The macro-structure* of the whole thing is of course mirroring Vivaldi's quattro Stagioni ( Four Seasons). The only dfference between his composition and mine being, that I start one season earlier than he did.
I must copy edit it anyway but it was good to have all the single parts accumulated in one place. but now I will take the spring part out of the first post. You will find it on my blog.
cheers
serge
* here is a link to text linguistics:
http://www.discourses.org/OldArticles/A%...ctures.pdf
Your second sentence nails it, the only difference being, that I include your name, too. ,-)
,-) re: French a synonym for gay: I'm so glad, I live in Germany bc here this synonym, does SO not apply. If you don't want French women I surely will. Je vous en remercie beaucoup pour ces mots. ;-))))
cheers!
I must copy edit it anyway but it was good to have all the single parts accumulated in one place. but now I will take the spring part out of the first post. You will find it on my blog.
cheers
serge
* here is a link to text linguistics:
http://www.discourses.org/OldArticles/A%...ctures.pdf
(05-03-2013, 08:18 AM)rowens Wrote: It might be unfair to critique work that has my name on it. And who wouldn't want their name filed alongside Newsclippy? She might not know it yet, but she has talent that's growing.
I also can't critique because I'm drinking and have drunk.
In America we drink Absinthe right out of the bottle, because French is a synonym for gay. Not that gay's bad when I'm drunk. It gets me to the same place.
It's not winter, it's spring!
May Day was dark and gloomy.
May-eve was dark and gloomy, and I did something bad.
But I have wine and beer in abundance left over.
I'll get back to this poem, if I haven't drunkenly pig's-arsed it.
I don't think one post can do that, now.
Your second sentence nails it, the only difference being, that I include your name, too. ,-)
(05-06-2013, 04:56 PM)serge gurkski Wrote: I'm almost inclined to think that the teaser for that other poem is a tad too fat. To put it in a nutshell: "spring follows winter". The macro-structure* of the whole thing is of course mirroring Vivaldi's quattro Stagioni ( Four Seasons). The only dfference between his composition and mine being, that I start one season earlier than he did.
I must copy edit it anyway but it was good to have all the single parts accumulated in one place. but now I will take the spring part out of the first post. You will find it on my blog.
cheers
serge
* here is a link to text linguistics:
http://www.discourses.org/OldArticles/A%...ctures.pdf
(05-03-2013, 08:18 AM)rowens Wrote: It might be unfair to critique work that has my name on it. And who wouldn't want their name filed alongside Newsclippy? She might not know it yet, but she has talent that's growing.
I also can't critique because I'm drinking and have drunk.
In America we drink Absinthe right out of the bottle, because French is a synonym for gay. Not that gay's bad when I'm drunk. It gets me to the same place.
It's not winter, it's spring!
May Day was dark and gloomy.
May-eve was dark and gloomy, and I did something bad.
But I have wine and beer in abundance left over.
I'll get back to this poem, if I haven't drunkenly pig's-arsed it.
I don't think one post can do that, now.
Your second sentence nails it, the only difference being, that I include your name, too. ,-)
,-) re: French a synonym for gay: I'm so glad, I live in Germany bc here this synonym, does SO not apply. If you don't want French women I surely will. Je vous en remercie beaucoup pour ces mots. ;-))))
cheers!
