05-06-2010, 05:42 PM
(05-05-2010, 11:43 AM)billy Wrote: the village pond thaws
carp basks open-mouthed
as water boatman return
Katsushika Hokusai 1760-1849 ( carps)
![[Image: 800px-Hokusai_Carps.jpg]](http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/5/58/Hokusai_Carps.jpg/800px-Hokusai_Carps.jpg)
Very, very elegant. I'm jealous
. I can just picture the cracking remnants of ice, the silents gasps of the fish.Personally, I would've said
"carp bask open-mouthed
as water boatmen return"
but that's more personal taste than anything. It's spot on as it is
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?