The Bigger They Are:

[billy]

Goliath sleeps:
A pebble flies and hits the spot.
Goliath slept.
He roared so loud, but now he weeps.
When David swung his sling, and shot
the philistine would lose the pot;
Goliath sleeps.

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Tried my hand at a Rondelet; The instructions on how too, can be found here.

First of all, thanks for returning to those lessons, they're meant as an ongoing reference as well as an introduction (I still look up rhyme schemes for many forms, the only ones I always remember exactly are the sonnets and villanelles).

I don't mind the subject matter, I think it's perfectly good for a rondelet, but changing to "Goliath slept" for your refrain really does not work for me at all. I don't feel that there's room in such a little poem to abandon the rhyme scheme AND the repetition. My advice would be to find a word other than "sleeps" for your refrain (I can't think of any just now though), since that only involves changing the A and one a line.

oops, i thought i were being avante garde have sorted it out.

i decide that if i can't post post off the bat, i'll do some of the classwork we have here (it forced/helps me) to get something done write wise.