The Party Boys

[addy]

Yeah... Alot work has gone into this one.

The Party Boys.

…How I used to go to all the parties,
Oh ever since the beginnings of our times:
There’d be “football-cake”, jellies and ice cream Such a fun image
Then after, we’d sink screaming into the pirate riddled depths of the
Ball pool, furtherly exploring its expanses,
Now, laid teeming (infested) maybe a comma would suffice, as a parenthesis doesn't seem right; it's practically just a synonym, rather than a meaty elaboration with fanatic shark impressions
Of those children, (after too much cake) maybe "too much cake" should be after smiling that lay smiling as if
frozen, within the jammed family photograph,
Within the ancient Nikon A1 of my mind These last two images (both preluded with "within") perform similar functions... I think you should just stick with the Nikon one. It's far more interesting

Oh their childish impressions, almost as frightful
as how I’m forgetful to the length of time
It had been since I went to such parties,
and yet these Impressions are still as frightful:
As frightfully wonderful as those happy children
Playing their games of whose nicknames we’d
now use nostalgically In drinking games almost eight years later I think this stanza needs the most work. At certain points it meanders around and talks about a whole lot of nothing: "childish impressions, frightful....since I went to such parties.... yet impressions are still frightful.... frightfully wonderful as those happy children playing their games whose nicknames..." etc. You get the picture. Just give it a good trim (leave out parts already established before) and I think this'll work really well

Drowning ourselves in the no need for "the" alcohol, daring ourselves to do better!
Until gravitational law throws Newton’s books at us: good one
falling over, throwing up, whilst simultaneously
telling one another “Howwwf’huckin’ muchsh”
each other loves one another!
of how it feels to be, in at least in an Inherited
sence…

“… Bbbrrruuuuveeerrrssshhh.” LOL Quite an irreverent ending