Obsession Over If

[billy]

i've read this more than once, and even discussed it with addy. (she's my sounding board ) and i have a problem. i like the idea, i like some of the content but i'm not sure about it's execution. Kipling's IF is one of my favourite poems so i can't help but judge this against IT; though i do realise the content there was his son whilst here it's the actuality of IF

If the world had been expected,
she wouldn't have cried.
if time had a form,
she wouldn't have ignored it. it already feels more like the anser is the obsession.

When breathing took time
after she couldn't catch it.
exercising inhaling-exhaling
it has been settled to a notion. here the obsessions seems to have left.

Does it make her broken?

If obvious kept it's meaning,
she would have stayed near.
if love would of been,
she wouldn't of wanted.

She knows her skin
enough to know
that it had been tainted
fingerprints can be evidence.

If innocence would have begged her,
she wouldn't have left.
if faith would of had purpose,
she would have been saved.

She brings hindsight
with her when she sleeps,
and when she sleeps
she dreams it.

Does it make her broken?

If anything would have been visible,
she wouldn't have taken her eyes off of it.
if destiny would have been friendly,
she wouldn't have been scared.

She was disavowed from the world.
existing upon it-she's no longer in it.
though she clasped the earth once
she stands on her toes to barely feel it.

If it just had been a thought,
would she still be thinking?
if she had truly knew it,
would she have known it?

She knows, she has to know
knowing is not always knowledge.
sometimes it is a place and a time
and when it happens, it is a memory. i love this stanza but it's of another something other than IF

Does this make her broken? [/b]same here, great end line but not of IF[/b]

i like the poem but i'm struggling to see it as an obsession over IF. what i can see; is an obsession over SHE

thanks for the read.