What Elephants Remember

[Philatone]

i realize the change is dramatic. perhaps i could separate and create two poems, using each as a base (similar to your idea, todd, about a sequence). to be honest, this is the version that gets closest to what i had intended in the beginning; the original began taking a direction and mind that i hadn't really anticipated. its detachment scared me in a way and felt too-telling/ omniscent

I may remove V. 4, create a new poem, and continue editing versions 1-3

don, leanne- am certainly going to take your suggestions into consideration. thunder captures more of a hanging for me than lightning does; the latter is just too quick. thanks for the time