07-15-2012, 10:45 PM
I am not here to give serious critique, I cannot anyway 
However, I have a certain irishness about me and in the reading of this poem (obviously in an Irish accent) it has such smoothness either read silently or aloud that it just flows perfectly to my ears. I love the repeating "and while away, and while away" it adds that folklore feel to it in a hypnotic way and really works in the poems setting. The only reason I would like it expanded would be because I wanted to read more! Sorry for butting in but had to say, I love it!
However, I have a certain irishness about me and in the reading of this poem (obviously in an Irish accent) it has such smoothness either read silently or aloud that it just flows perfectly to my ears. I love the repeating "and while away, and while away" it adds that folklore feel to it in a hypnotic way and really works in the poems setting. The only reason I would like it expanded would be because I wanted to read more! Sorry for butting in but had to say, I love it!