07-14-2012, 11:38 AM
Ah, once again into the breach!
"pollen in the crevices
filling trenches like
sad soldiers
exposed by a tendency
to huddle in fear"
Why is pollen like sad soldiers? I understand that congregating at the bottom makes it stand out. Do you mean sad as in pathetic?
filling trenches like
pathetic soldiers
exposed by a tendency
to huddle in fear"
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Not wild about the word "vandal" because it carries the connotation of theft, but the only other thing I can think of is " defacer" and that doesn't do much for me. It seems like there should be a word like "vandalizer" which say you do this, but not necessarily you are this.
Overall I like this one. I'm going with God as vandal, but it could also go the other way I think, but I like the idea of using how humans get so upset about how things should be, so that's how I'm going to go with it.
Dale
"pollen in the crevices
filling trenches like
sad soldiers
exposed by a tendency
to huddle in fear"
Why is pollen like sad soldiers? I understand that congregating at the bottom makes it stand out. Do you mean sad as in pathetic?
filling trenches like
pathetic soldiers
exposed by a tendency
to huddle in fear"
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Not wild about the word "vandal" because it carries the connotation of theft, but the only other thing I can think of is " defacer" and that doesn't do much for me. It seems like there should be a word like "vandalizer" which say you do this, but not necessarily you are this.
Overall I like this one. I'm going with God as vandal, but it could also go the other way I think, but I like the idea of using how humans get so upset about how things should be, so that's how I'm going to go with it.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.