07-13-2012, 10:39 PM
Thanks, guys. I've made some alterations, mostly to the 1st verse.
First verse had more detail than it merited.I like the transition to "Talking is easier" though, so I need something.
The poem is about a patient I knew who killed himself and mostly it's me speaking to this dead person, though the 1st verse is reflecting upon a previous death I witnessed.I was a student nurse and had to shave this dead guy and I found it a very distressing experience - the scrape of blades of glass, the chalk, the squeak, is an attempt to portray that....badly, it seems!
Talking is easier (to dead bodies) than handling them.
I sit beside it now - "it" is the plant.
your refusal to take yes for an answer. - a very negative attitude.
The last verse is a reflection on his suicide, which wasn't entirely successful. He spent several days on life support, his beard growing longer.
First verse had more detail than it merited.I like the transition to "Talking is easier" though, so I need something.
The poem is about a patient I knew who killed himself and mostly it's me speaking to this dead person, though the 1st verse is reflecting upon a previous death I witnessed.I was a student nurse and had to shave this dead guy and I found it a very distressing experience - the scrape of blades of glass, the chalk, the squeak, is an attempt to portray that....badly, it seems!
Talking is easier (to dead bodies) than handling them.
I sit beside it now - "it" is the plant.
your refusal to take yes for an answer. - a very negative attitude.
The last verse is a reflection on his suicide, which wasn't entirely successful. He spent several days on life support, his beard growing longer.
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.