Dreams

[addy]

I like the feeling of being lulled, and led, but right now I don't think you've structured the poem to be conducive to that theme. There were a few points where I felt you were cutting yourself off too soon, instead of allowing the poem to snake and wind around more. For example, you have this beautiful image of silver wheat over a path, but then you immediately ponder when and how it ends, thus mentally "shortening" the path and not allowing the reader set foot in it..... I know that's kind of the point of your poem, but a little tease wouldn't hurt

Dare not sleep
For to enter the realms of dreams unguided
The soul of the wanderer may be lost
Dreaming for eternity, even when awake
Oh, how I wish to wander through the age of dreams might be overstuffing it with "dreams" at this point
To follow the footsteps of fate
To find a path
A path framed by fields of silver wheat Agree with arbil, best to shorten this to "-- find a path framed by fields of silver wheat" (nice image btw)
I know not where this path goes
But where it ends
I must take care
Not to lose my soul
Or be driven mad
By days of night and nights of day
For this is a dream