Fingal's Cave

[Philatone]

hey dale!

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Let us go to Fingal's Cave
a year the same as just one day,
and listen to the echoes play
and while away, and while away.

Let us talk of gods now gone,
although their stories linger on,
and let us sing their ancient song
at Fingul’s Cave, and while away.

On silver road they come again,
frightening off all lesser men,
but we embrace them as our kin,
in Fingul’s Cave, and while away.

And if friends ask where do we play, ...no other line felt as forced as this to me; that "do" threw me off a bit
tell them we are with the Fey,
for in their world we choose to stay,
and while away, and while away.


©2012 –Erthona

not a lot of comments on the lines themselves. I think billy made a fine point; the sum of the parts is greater than the actual pieces used. it has a pretty good flow, a nice little sinister quality to it, especially with the close. I liked