Fingal's Cave

[billy]

at first i thought it irish based then i remembered Mendelssohn's concert of the same name which i think is based on somewhere along the scottish coast. i probably thought irish because of the filim; finnigans wake

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Let us go to Fingal's Cave
a year the same as just one day, i like the feeling this evokes.
and listen to the echoes play
and while away, and while away.

Let us talk of gods now gone,
although their stories linger on,
and let us sing their ancient song
at Fingul’s Cave, and while away. the refrain is smooth

On silver road they come again,
frightening off all lesser men,
but we embrace them as our kin,
in Fingul’s Cave, and while away.

And if friends ask where do we play,
tell them we are with the Fey, really good tie in to the cave and the content of the poem as whole.
for in their world we choose to stay,
and while away, and while away.


©2012 –Erthona

it reads very weak yet feels stronger than the sum of it's parts. the refrain is excellent and lilting as something that pertains to folk lore should seem to be. i like that you didn't inundate it with fairy folk and such. i really want to fault it because, well just because, but in truth i love it. it would make a cracking little folk song.

on yet another read of it; my sentiments are the same but i wonder if an odd image or two would enhance it.
thanks for the read.