A Call
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The second, the first is redundant.

Using "so" in "So go forth" is out of character for the pseudo-prophetic language you are using. Prophecy never justifies, equivocates, or explains.

Some punctuation to show where one sentence ends and another starts would be helpful.

This seems to be vague proclamations about undefined things.


Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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A Call - by way2epic4me - 07-07-2012, 11:51 PM
RE: A Call - by billy - 07-08-2012, 08:25 AM
RE: A Call - by Erthona - 07-08-2012, 08:15 PM
RE: A Call - by Philatone - 07-09-2012, 08:30 AM
RE: A Call - by addy - 07-09-2012, 12:46 PM
RE: A Call - by Timmycom - 07-13-2012, 12:04 PM
RE: A Call - by Paddygirl - 07-16-2012, 12:38 PM



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