it reads like a posh version of a sunday afternoon wife beating session of sorts. not sure the double jeopardy actually works in the body of the poem as it's more of a domestic for which he can be charged with every time he commits the act. the linoleum brings it into the realm of the real world. the last seem to make it want to be a murder which i suppose wife beating is in a way. i like the images but i'm having a bit of struggle as to where to place it. is about violence, is it about specifically wife beating.
the 1st stanza could i think be put to better use in setting the poem up by giving some clearer definition of where you want to take the reader.
all that said. it's a good readable poem that leaves the reader thinking .
the 1st stanza could i think be put to better use in setting the poem up by giving some clearer definition of where you want to take the reader.
all that said. it's a good readable poem that leaves the reader thinking .