Saudade

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@addy

Thank-you! The voice of the poem is meant to be split between the loss of Brazil (deforestation) and also the loss of a lover. It is meant to be a fairly enigmatic poem which can be taken in various different ways. The story behind it is based on a man who has lost his wife and believes it is a punishment from god because he works for logging company and feels strong remorse for what they do to the forest. The wife and forest are meant to intertwine within the poem. The last two stanzas are my pitiful attempt at trying to express his spirituality using the belief in the power of crystals and starsigns/fate, with the crystal being rutilated quartz (connected with spirit communication and dreams) and the chosen star signs (aquarius and pisces) are meant to represent him being as masculine destructive force (aquarious caused a mythical great flood) and the split feminine role (as pisces is two fish : P) but this might all be a bit weak and hard to understand. I'm admittedly not great with symbolism!

Ooh! i knew there was an enigma there, and now that you're describing there it sounds freaking awesome. The symbolism you chose is good, you just need to emphasize it more somehow,or make the poem a wee bit longer so you can put all that glorious detail in. Obviously word choice is key. For instance, I like the idea of you associating the crystal with dreaming, but I missed it a little because of "castles in the air", an image that does not refer to dreamscapes but rather to wishes (which may be something slightly different).