07-03-2012, 07:59 AM
Great fun, Ray -- my grammar nerd alter ego (ok, it's the one that usually gets control of my keyboard) loves the last couplet especially 
The only line I have a bit of a quibble about is "pirouettes expensive toes", which in my head has her lying on her back whirling her toes in some kind of weird little piggy dervish... but what happens in my head should probably stay there! I just wonder if "prances on expensive toes" might not work?
I must get back to my own laundry before decomposition sets in!
The only line I have a bit of a quibble about is "pirouettes expensive toes", which in my head has her lying on her back whirling her toes in some kind of weird little piggy dervish... but what happens in my head should probably stay there! I just wonder if "prances on expensive toes" might not work?
I must get back to my own laundry before decomposition sets in!
It could be worse