07-03-2012, 06:45 AM
It's a shame the 3rd line is without a rhyme. Can I suggest "but there's no doubt". I like "scopin' it out". I think the last verse suffers in comparison to the rest. The rhymes seem forced, especially
cant help if im modern
which in the context of the poem makes not much sense to me.But maybe I'm missing something.
cant help if im modern
which in the context of the poem makes not much sense to me.But maybe I'm missing something.
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.