07-02-2012, 11:42 AM
well done on not altering the title, i missed the obvious connection which i now see 
what few changes you made do make a difference, i like yin instead of ying as it's fresh and makes me think just that little bit more about it.
i think this is a good poem. with some strong images.
well done and thanks for the edit.
what few changes you made do make a difference, i like yin instead of ying as it's fresh and makes me think just that little bit more about it.
i think this is a good poem. with some strong images.
well done and thanks for the edit.