A Moment of Eternity (Rev. 2 Nov '12)

[Leanne]

Well now, this is something very different for you and very good!

A tickle of raspberry
buds the tongue -- love the creative verb
delighted senses yawn and stretch-- nice personification
ulterior motives
lower inhibitions. -- these two are my least favourite lines, simply because they're both common phrases, but they clarify meaning and not every word in a poem can be unusual so I'm not suggesting a change

Mahogany yang's inside,
outside pallid bubbles
yin from a distant room. -- I like the ambiguity of yin here, it can be taken as a noun or a verb (I kind of like the idea of a good yinning)

Adrift

pleasantly, burrowed -- I'm not sure if the comma works, I think I'd prefer "pleasantly burrowed into filthy cushions" to "adrift pleasantly"
into filthy cushions,
soaring-
like an eagle, -- nicely done, you've subverted the cliche
a drowning dog smiles.