07-01-2012, 05:39 PM
I love your imagery in this; it hits some great notes, bold and austere in all the right places. I don't know if it's a fault of the poem per se, it may just be part of its character.... but i found the story behind it a bit elusive. At first I thought the poem ecological somehow, with "her" as nature (we must burn her, river likened to a flow of tears) but later on you seem to be talking more specifically of a lover. But then, i suppose you were trying to capture something as universal as possible here?
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?