07-01-2012, 01:00 AM
Fantastic imagery, I enjoyed reading it. However, I felt it lacked emotion and insight and it didn't really bring anything new to the table.
I think it would really suit being a pic poem... I've only used it a couple of times myself (I'm not overly keen but I believe in trying things out!) - because it basically is a snapshot image of someone smoking heroin rather then an in-depth emotive account of someone experiencing heroin. It has inspired me to try and be more visual with my own poem though. I tend to underestimate the power of raw physical imagery in favour of atmosphere and feeling.
I think it would really suit being a pic poem... I've only used it a couple of times myself (I'm not overly keen but I believe in trying things out!) - because it basically is a snapshot image of someone smoking heroin rather then an in-depth emotive account of someone experiencing heroin. It has inspired me to try and be more visual with my own poem though. I tend to underestimate the power of raw physical imagery in favour of atmosphere and feeling.