Shadows

[Philatone]

hey!

Shadows ever fleeting in the dark alleys
Catching glimpses through lit windows of a world ...wanted to be sure that "catching" was the right word"
Only seen, never ventured ...a bit heavy on description for the next few lines. it reads like a report
They gather in a place
Lit by the darkest of moon light
Whispering things only whispered by shadows..this line does not help me much
They whisper of their windows
For each one has a window
Forever peering into
A world they long for
But it was not meant to be
For not even shadows dare to challenge fate
To rise against destiny
Here they come
The keepers of the windows
Frightened by shadows, only peering
They come with torches
Torches held aloft, held high
Spreading light into the dwellings of shadows
And scattering shadows into the sanctuaries of light
Not knowing, what they fear
Are merely shadows
So go forth, find you window
Pull back the curtains and fight for what fate denies you

Thanks in advance.

the repetitions of words (e.g., shadows, windows) was a bit heavy. I enjoyed the atmosphere you create with them, though.

the descriptions are missing a bit of energy as is. I think spending more time to elaborate on what you have would enhance the progression. I see elements of it when you describe the torches, but more could help the piece.

hope this is helpful