The Shite That Falls From Clouds.

[addy]

Solid structure. I think the surface texture is gorgeous, but the core of the poem is weaker: I'm guessing the "nightmare" that precipitates is the collective thoughts and actions of people and how it causes wars, devastation, etc, and indeed your imagery is sufficiently nightmarish and unnerving. but i don't get a strong sense of the message, or why you framed it as something that happens while we are unconscious. Perhaps its just my interpretation of it that's making it fuzzy.