06-24-2012, 10:47 AM
Does he seem too well educated because of the way I've written this poem? I did worry about that, confusing my voice with his, which should be hard and primitive. I sort of imagined him having been born when there was still arts and education, which all began decaying in the wars as he grew up. Then he conceived Sally and the "lads" with "ma". I may write another poem set in this universe, from the perspective of one of the last painters and poets. If I do I'll try cleaning up the time frame. Thanks for the kind feedback Bilbo
P.S: Do you think this poem should have a content warrning? I wrestled with putting one on, but decided not to because it contains no swearing or gore.
P.S: Do you think this poem should have a content warrning? I wrestled with putting one on, but decided not to because it contains no swearing or gore.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe