06-20-2012, 10:24 AM
Hi tectak, Geoff and Penguin,
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to these comments (job change and a lot of flying around).
Tectak: I'm glad the change worked...thanks again for pointing out the distinction.
Geoff: I appreciate the comments. I'll give them some thought especially the figurative vs literal--a very insightful catch.
Penguin--You made some really good points, and suggested cuts that I'll certainly consider. I see what you mean about been. While I sort of liked the layered meaning on the break in retrospect it is a bit blah. I'll give more thought to rationalization.
All helpful. Thank you all.
Best,
Todd
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to these comments (job change and a lot of flying around).
Tectak: I'm glad the change worked...thanks again for pointing out the distinction.
Geoff: I appreciate the comments. I'll give them some thought especially the figurative vs literal--a very insightful catch.
Penguin--You made some really good points, and suggested cuts that I'll certainly consider. I see what you mean about been. While I sort of liked the layered meaning on the break in retrospect it is a bit blah. I'll give more thought to rationalization.
All helpful. Thank you all.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson