06-19-2012, 04:27 PM
There once I cut the dried, dead poles of summer’s dahlia flags
for me it's the extended sentence i think that feels a bit much.
my suggestion would be to take flags out and redo any grammar changes thats required.
There once I cut the dried, dead poles of summer dahlias.
the opening there still feels off but i have no idea how to deal with it.
for me it's the extended sentence i think that feels a bit much.
my suggestion would be to take flags out and redo any grammar changes thats required.
There once I cut the dried, dead poles of summer dahlias.
the opening there still feels off but i have no idea how to deal with it.