06-19-2012, 05:01 AM
Hi, Sumeet.
The overall core of tantric philosophy and transcendental communion in this offering is presented with reverence. I really enjoy the worshipful tone for the feminine aspect. The triumvirate of organic incarnations of fertility symbols was nice, you used earth, cosmic plane, and womb. There is clear interplay between incarnation and spirit, awakening and physicality.
You seemed to embrace the concept of duality, as above so as below.
I kind of hope there is a companion piece, because this only dealt with light/sex/communion without addressing dark/separation/destruction. I did see a few hints at the possibility this is a poetic re telling of the Vedic
Trimurti, and surely the edification of Brahma?
I do feel S1 L2 & S2 L2 need work. I like the idea, but not the presentation.
The enjabment works for me.
"Pluck me from
hypersilence" is rather inspired, especially drawing out hypersilence the way you did. The space between the letters not only denotes atomic space, but also the pre-quiet of Avyachta and the held breath between heartbeats.
I do not like S22.
There are a few places that could use a small touch of editing. Overall I really like this piece. Apologies if I am way off base.
The overall core of tantric philosophy and transcendental communion in this offering is presented with reverence. I really enjoy the worshipful tone for the feminine aspect. The triumvirate of organic incarnations of fertility symbols was nice, you used earth, cosmic plane, and womb. There is clear interplay between incarnation and spirit, awakening and physicality.
You seemed to embrace the concept of duality, as above so as below.
I kind of hope there is a companion piece, because this only dealt with light/sex/communion without addressing dark/separation/destruction. I did see a few hints at the possibility this is a poetic re telling of the Vedic
Trimurti, and surely the edification of Brahma?
I do feel S1 L2 & S2 L2 need work. I like the idea, but not the presentation.
The enjabment works for me.
"Pluck me from
hypersilence" is rather inspired, especially drawing out hypersilence the way you did. The space between the letters not only denotes atomic space, but also the pre-quiet of Avyachta and the held breath between heartbeats.
I do not like S22.
There are a few places that could use a small touch of editing. Overall I really like this piece. Apologies if I am way off base.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?