sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil edit 1 by addy

[tectak]

A solid piece. The last couple lines sums it up well I think. Not sure about "He startled leaps to self-defending", as it seems awkward to me (might be just me) but otherwise I think it has excelled in its intent

Thanks addy,
I just stuck this up for phil to chew on, as a bone left over from from Lego con tres heridas, re. the guilt stanza.
On the "startled leap" your point is taken. It is an interesting grammatical error on my part.....interesting because though the punctuation is somewhat minimal it felt as though it SHOULD make sense........and I criticise others for this presumptive failing. Would "He, startled, leaps to self-defending" get me off this hook?
Best,
Tectak