06-16-2012, 09:50 AM
Hi, Mark.
I think the drifting, inebriated vibe worked in this piece. The yin and yang alongside the vibrancy of raspberry and mahogany mixed with pallid was very complimentary.
I think "yangs" should either be singular or a conjunction "yang's". Disoriented somehow seems too sharp and concrete, even though by definition it is somewhat nebulous. Perhaps something more like "adrift", to compliment the haziness.
Enjoyable, nonetheless.
I think the drifting, inebriated vibe worked in this piece. The yin and yang alongside the vibrancy of raspberry and mahogany mixed with pallid was very complimentary.
I think "yangs" should either be singular or a conjunction "yang's". Disoriented somehow seems too sharp and concrete, even though by definition it is somewhat nebulous. Perhaps something more like "adrift", to compliment the haziness.
Enjoyable, nonetheless.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?