sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil edit 1 by addy
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sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil edit 1 by addy
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06-16-2012, 09:13 AM
A solid piece. The last couple lines sums it up well I think. Not sure about "He startled leaps to self-defending", as it seems awkward to me (might be just me) but otherwise I think it has excelled in its intent
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil edit 1 by addy - by tectak - 06-16-2012, 05:32 AM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by Philatone - 06-16-2012, 07:18 AM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by addy - 06-16-2012, 09:13 AM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by tectak - 06-16-2012, 04:29 PM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by addy - 06-17-2012, 12:18 PM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by billy - 06-16-2012, 07:04 PM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by tectak - 06-16-2012, 11:21 PM
RE: sonnet (nearly) on a guilty man waking for phil - by billy - 06-17-2012, 09:02 AM
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