06-13-2012, 10:54 AM
football fever can be a biatch the main edit in the 1st stanza works well, the last line gives a feel that something should be looked at but screw that.
in my 1st piece of feedback i stated something about the tower blocks being blown in 88. and said i felt cheated. after reading the edit i realize how stupid that statement (in connection to this poem was) while it holds true, the fact is the line you wrote has all the explanation needed to know what happened maybe not why or how but that the towers were blown up (probably demolished.) so i'm glad you took no heed of that piece of feedback.
on the last line or two; i think they work okay. but that's not to say the others are wrong
good luck with the football