The Flood

[addy]

I quite like the edit, but i do agree that sometimes the lines get a little too self-contained. For example, the first and second line of the poem read as if they only share a tangential relationship, perhaps due to the type of phrasing chosen. Though I like the snapshots, threading them all together more might help give a larger and less myopic sense of context with the scene. Still, I very much love your deft turns of phrase