The Missing Game

[addy]

this one reads like a song to me . Here's a few of my thoughts

V:2
You're chasing ghosts
in this missing game
don't look down
no, don't look down This first stanza doesn't really have a clear thing I can grab on to as a reader, the context a bit too mysterious to serve as an effective introduction. (what's a missing game? don't look down at what? why is the object "up" in the first place?) That's just my take

Stay a while and maybe we'll forget
all these things we've learned to hate
before I leave you standing "standing" doesn't add much... "leave you at the edge..." does the job fine
at the edge of lonely hearted-ness
staring up and away from the abyss
of things that cannot be

'Cause I don't miss you like a lover should
and I'm no longer making love to ghosts
under these nostalgic, bruised skies
that spell out our names
in a broken you-me tragedy I love the line "bruised skies that spell out our names". Imo you don't need "broken you me tragedy"

So don't look down
no, don't look down
at the dusty bones of me
that always break your ribs open
just I think filler words like "just", you can do away with stay a while and maybe we'll forget
all these things we've learned to hate
while chasing dreams that were never
meant to be