06-11-2012, 12:13 AM
dale
thanks; you hit on a number of points that were later additions that perhaps were not as strong as what I had originally. I'm putting up a revision based on your suggestions. I'm trying to save the last stanza before doing something dramatic; see if this change fits your preference any better. i am open to changing it, but want to try to make it work first
thanks; you hit on a number of points that were later additions that perhaps were not as strong as what I had originally. I'm putting up a revision based on your suggestions. I'm trying to save the last stanza before doing something dramatic; see if this change fits your preference any better. i am open to changing it, but want to try to make it work first
Written only for you to consider.