The Flood

[Philatone]

penguin-- thanks for the kind and critical words; they were helpful! made several changes on the parts you suggested (seems like they hit on a common theme with others). thanks again for the time

billy-- it does seem that way! just going with whatever comes out that can be worked with, can't always decide on the material and topic. think i've found a stronger transition to close the poem out. I'm hesitatant to add another couplet or two because I don't want to lose the impact of the first images (at least right now). oh, and I did want the water to lower like a bridge I did try to address several of the points you raised in the line-by; appreciate the read

addy- tried strengthening the opening, though it may need more. I was trying to go for a more diffused ending in actuality. for now i think i will keep the water and bridge bit as is, unless something strikes me in the future. thank you for your time and critique!