06-08-2012, 11:22 AM
i have looked this over and tried to make sense of it and can only say i feel it's beyond redemption as far as an edit goes.
on this basis i'll try and do a poem in it's stead from scratch. wile an odd line in this may be okay, i think the fruit is too ripe to save. my edit will be as a the phoenix risen. thanks for all the input and feedback, while i won't delete it, i will leave it as an example of a poem gone too far to be saved
on this basis i'll try and do a poem in it's stead from scratch. wile an odd line in this may be okay, i think the fruit is too ripe to save. my edit will be as a the phoenix risen. thanks for all the input and feedback, while i won't delete it, i will leave it as an example of a poem gone too far to be saved