The Flood

[billy]

i'll just comment on the edit (which i think is an improvement)

V.2. complete rewrite

They pass the halls of root and stone
jaws opened weeks before. this lines needs something more as it's very weak

Pupae, eggs, larvae, queen
a head above the soldiers, drones, needs some clarity, are you saying drones are taller?

scattering in files
from sculpted caves
for higher ground, i like this, it gives them a sort of survival instinct

a hollow handrail,
a lifeless palm.

A colony in reach
of strands of sun would 'of a stranded sun' work better?

waits for storms to pass how many storms are there? i'm presuming 1 storm
and water to lower
like a bridge. See them, needs some clarity. at present it seems the water is lowering like a bridge. would a semicolon after bridge help?

through the pane
dotted with drops of rainfall, drops feels excessive

blinds open as daylight
fumes into grey and into black?

you're into the insect world aren't you
i like some of things going on in it. but like the yellowjacket one this needs the same treatment. the transition to the last 2 stanza from those above need to be better seen.
i liked the lifeless palm couplet and think you should try and extend the image with one or maybe two more couplets.
i don't think you need that much of an edit to make this one work just as well as the yellow jacket poem.

thanks for the read.

ps, just saw the question mark comment by someone else and have to agree, it isn't a question.