Rockstar

[Wildcard]

I thought this a good piece, but I'll be honest the rhymes scheme is weak.

Jargon doesn't rhyme with bargain
Ghost doesn't rhyme with engrossed

It could be viewed as a matter of personal taste, of course, but I would prefer that all the rhymes ring true.

As far as the content, I loved the broken-down feel of the piece as well as

but crack inside his pipe becomes the cracks inside his mind,
and it cracks in the foundations of the life he left behind.

Quite an interesting line and good internal rhymes.

Thanks for sharing.