ANZACs

[Philatone]

my biggest comment would be the distance that seems to exist between the speaker and the topic. the piece strikes me as being too general for a sense of investment in what is being described. there is intention to be invested, I think, but the emotion just never hit me, and I think it's a poem where the emotion needs to hit me. it got closer in the second half, with the explicit mentioning of the Anzacs. The poem needs more of that to separate it from a crowded topic